I have a friend (shocking, I know, stop) that once told me about a story she wrote that was in the first person. But the story had 7 points of view, that means 7 individuals all trying to tell their story at the same time. But the different people and point of view isn't what made it confusing, she said what made it confusing is the fact that they were interchanging mid paragraph and she could rarely tell who was talking. My friend really the story but she couldn't tell what was happening with some of the pronoun antecedents. The pronouns in a sentence have to agree with the antecedent in order to know who is talking or what the subject of the sentence is.
Lets make some examples so we know how to fix those.
As John and Sherri watched the ducks, Sherri assumed they liked them very much.
Who did the liking in this sentence? It's unclear, two "they's" in a row can be confusing. We don't know, but if we get a little more specific with pronouns like this:
As John and Sherri watched the ducks, they assumed the ducks liked them very much.
See what we did there? Now the antecedent and the pronouns agree in the sentence so we can tell that it is the ducks that like John and Sherri.
Another example is object pronouns. Object pronouns (obviously) belong to objects but they also need to agree in a sentence in order for it to make sense. But when you aren't specific they can sometimes be confused with regular pronouns:
He set his alarm so he would wake up in the morning he did.
Let's see, there are too many pronouns so if we specify:
Jason set his alarm so he would wake up before his Dad did.
Now we know that the second he was Jason referring to himself and and his father.
So make sure you have your pronoun antecedents agree with each other, so that your readers will agree that your writing is great.
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